※ 引述《jt910203 (aa)》之銘言：
: 題目：
: 現在越來越多人喜歡使用網路的即時訊息，他們偏好在網路上打字勝於打電話。
: 1. 請給一些造成這種情況的原因。
: 2. 這樣的溝通方式會產生什麼樣的潛在問題？
: Nowadays, with the advance of technology, sending instant message on the net
: is getting more and more popular . People prefer sending message in typing
: way rather than giving phone call. That is because most of electronic
: products have the function of surfing the net such as computers and
: smartphones, which of them used by people everywhere. People not only can
: send and get the instant message in one second, but don’t have to pay the
: high expense of phone fee. Therefore, this kind of communication way becomes
: a trend in life of people.
Nowadays, with the advance of technology, sending instant messages on the Net
is getting more and more popular. People prefer sending text messages to
making a phone call. The main reason to account for the preference is the
convenience that electronic devices, such as computers and smartphones, bring
to. Such a communication is not restricted by time and space. People can send
their messages and get responses quickly. Another reason is the cost. Compared
with a phone call, which may cost over 100 dollars in one minute, a text
message on the Net is completely free. Due to the two reasons above, sending
text messages on the Net has been very trendy and even indispensable to some
people.
根據你的論點,幫你改了第一段,給你一些建議
1.段落的結構要清楚,尤其這種論理的文章,主題句,支持句和結論要有骨架,讓讀者易於
閱讀。
2.文法要掌握。例如message是可數名詞要記得加s,net小寫是網子,大寫才是網路。
prefer Ving to Ving。
3.句子的結構要正確。which of them,還有not only，這兩句的用法有問題。
一些淺見,希望你的寫作能愈來愈進步
: On the other hand, this new communication way have two potential problems.
: Firstly, students may like to spend most of their time chatting with their
: friends on the net, and neglect their school works. Secondly, if people
: always interactive with people in this way, they will have bad human
: relationships. Therefore, even if the new communication way is changing people
: ’s life, we still have to communicate with people in real way such as
: companng with family and our friends, and should not be controlled by
: electronic products.
: 幾百年沒寫一篇完整的英文作文了
: 想請各位批改下我的作文
: 可以的話...希望能告訴我通過中高級寫作還要加強哪些地方
: 謝謝各位