※ 引述《samok (記者只會抄公社低卡記錄7)》之銘言：
: 學姊寫的作文 待會幫他改一下
: Dear John
: How's everything going on? I want to tell you a great news that I was
How's everything going?/ What's going on?
: admitted to a language school in Los Angeles. I will study there next month.
admitted在這邊比較像是申請還沒過關的感覺，如果兩句寫在一起會比較好
EX:I'm going to study in a language school in Los Angeles in next month.
: May you help me rent a house in advance? I promise to treat you to a fantastic
關係比較熟用Could 就可以了 還有記得要加to
(may/could 原型 但help後面+to V是幫...的意思)
Could you help me to rent a house there in advance?
(要不要預先我這邊感覺不出來 我是不會寫in advance啦 但沒什麼問題我就先留著)
: meal as a fairing. I hope you can seek a house corresponding to followings:
我覺得不用to
這句怪怪的 我會寫 In return, I promise I will treat you a big meal.
然後我會擺最後
I hope you can find a house by those followings.
英文的冒號(colon)千萬別亂用 乖乖點句點就好
: First, the size of house doesn't matter, but the location is close to UCLA.
has to be
: Second, the area nearby is good public transport. Third, it is located in a
Second, the area has good public transport network.
: quieter area. Fourth, the room is clean and yet it concludes bed, desk,
你被騙了 用quiet就可以了
conclude=結論 include=包括 家具這個名詞沒寫到 furniture(注意不可數)
我會寫the room is tidy and it includes some furniture such as bed, desk,
and air-conditioner.
: air-conditioner. Finally, it might be better for the neighbor being student
我會寫If the neighbors were all students instead of Chinese would be better
for me.
: instead of chinese. Besides, the rent must be reasonable. Please email
Chinese大寫 information加個the
Finally 最好擺最後，所以besides可以跟finally對調順序
: information about the house to me as soon as possible. Thank you very much.
In return, I promise I will treat you a big meal.Thank you very much.
: Jenny
寫信的話最好加一句Sincerely,
PS: 我差點改linguistic school
https://www.hopenglish.com/why-is-there-a-noun-before-a-noun