[分享] SK2 J2: 例子發展什麼該寫?什麼不該寫?

作者: robert416 (蘿蔔)   2023-12-20 17:26:08
大家好,我是Jacob (常春藤盟校賓州大學英語教學碩士),SK2TOEFL團隊實力養成班顧
問,也專精在TOEFL機經(JJ)彙總整理,所以也可以叫我J2.
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今天這篇文章一樣來探討同學學術討論寫作最困擾的地方,就是知道例子發展要具體,但
常常「該說的沒講到,不該發展的寫了一堆。」
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正文開始:
直接拿同學一篇文章來測試大家的敏感度,同學們先看以下文章,覺得哪個部分是不太需
要,或是可以不提的?
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題目是:
One such proposal is to make class attendance optional. For instance, under
an optional-attendance policy, university students could choose not to attend
classes but instead study the course materials and acquire the knowledge on
their own time. Their grade would then be based entirely on exams or papers.
What are your thoughts on this approach?
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F同學回答:
In my opinion, I strongly support Claire’s perspective that students do not
have to attend every class session, and I would like to add that if students
can choose courses where attendance is not compulsory, they can participate
in more courses they want. For instance, when I was a college student, I
wanted to be an integrated circuit designer. To achieve this goal, I needed
to take a course named “Circuit Theory”. However, the course conflicted
with the schedule of my compulsory subject. Nevertheless, the Circuit Theory
is optional attendance, so I had a chance to take the course. Furthermore, my
college provided many courses with an optional attendance policy. Therefore,
I could enroll in more courses that I was interested in, such as Japanese,
Semiconductor Physics, and Electronic Devices without worrying about
attendance. Overall, recognizing the importance of discipline, I, however,
maintain that students will have more opportunities to take courses if the
courses offer optional attendance.
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請同學先選擇下列哪個是不太需要提到的:
A) I wanted to be an integrated circuit designer.
B) I needed to take a course named “Circuit Theory.”
C) such as Japanese, Semiconductor Physics, and Electronic Devices
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J2個人認為,I wanted to be an integrated circuit designer 在這裡是不太需要提到
的,因為這邊同學論點是「如果出席是非強制的,可以修到更多課」,所以發展時,只要
講到「很想上A課,但跟B課衝堂」,應該就達到目的了。至於為什麼某堂課要上的原因
,在這邊就沒那麼必要了。
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想要確定具體例子發展方向,可以看我之前的文章喔:
你的寫作發展方向是對的嗎?by J2
https://reurl.cc/4Rzkrj
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常被說例子發展具體方向不對嗎?
https://reurl.cc/RWdNp9
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如何讓口說寫作發展例子更貼切?by J2
https://reurl.cc/K467xp
Cheers,
J2

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