英文自傳求批

作者: sz06060817 (rose)   2019-07-08 04:24:04
My name is , I am studying in the third year of studies towards National Chia
yi University - Department of Marketing and Tourism Management. I am passion a
te for social media marketing.
I am a coordinator of the treasure love community responsible for the plannin
g and execution of the event. I was responsible for an activity to Welcome New
Students resulting in expanding my team to 10 people from 5 initially.
I have served as a public relations role experience in writing and writing a c
opy. I have an idea on planning a copy.
Despite my hectic schedule at school, I also participate in several non curric
ular activities, including volunteering for my dormitory, working as a teachin
g assistance at an English Institution...etc. I have learned a lot of interper
sonal and time management skills through the experiences.
I often write about urcosme's product experience. I will publish a product in
ig and get 154 people by love.
Foxconn 94 students internship program.
Help promote Asia Pacific Telecom and computers.
Winning experience:
The 2018 national colleges and universities green tourism creative travel plan
ning competition is preferred. The design concept attracts consumers' journeys
.
License Expertise: The score is 725 points. I use tutoring and listening to En
glish broadcasts to increase my English ability.
While I am looking into a full time summer internship, I will also be availabl
e to continue working on a part-time basis when the new semester gets started.
I will be more than happy to discuss with you further about my future schedul
e for working as a part timer at your company.
Thank you very much for your time. I look forward to discussing with you soon.
可以請大家幫我看看,並給予我建議嗎?謝謝
作者: PANG920 (PANGSHAN)   2019-07-08 05:45:00
直接找人重新寫一篇 感覺會好點
作者: xvited945 (sk0k0)   2019-07-08 06:40:00
這篇真的不行,表面上是英文,但實際上都是用中文邏輯寫的,感覺很像把中文自傳丟進google翻譯的結果,建議找人直接重寫一篇+1
作者: liicat (liicat)   2019-07-08 07:01:00
建議你英文不好就只寫中文自傳就可以了,或者去網路上找英文自傳的template 改成自己的版本,你這個要整個砍掉重練
作者: KEYork (York)   2019-07-08 07:09:00
我居然看得懂
作者: psychopath (psychopath)   2019-07-08 07:50:00
中文式英文 第二句開頭就不想看了
作者: jack0419 (jack0419)   2019-07-08 08:00:00
用西元吧......
作者: dosandonts (Catalano is A+)   2019-07-08 08:05:00
英文寫的不太好 看不是很懂
作者: kobe06180618 (xd020488978)   2019-07-08 08:40:00
好慘 先去參考別人寫的範本吧
作者: jayouch (兔兔毛光光)   2019-07-08 08:45:00
這是中文還英文....gg
作者: qwert8392042 (Weiiiii)   2019-07-08 08:51:00
小建議,英文不光是單字而已,句型跟文法也都很重要,看得出來你在單字上有用心,但句型不是很順暢,文法上也有明顯錯誤。如果把你這份自傳當成你交給公司的第一份作業處理,你覺得應該再花多少功夫才能達到滿分呢?
作者: pttnowash (不用洗)   2019-07-08 09:37:00
My penis long.
作者: minniegc (Minnie)   2019-07-08 10:29:00
英文字傳看到第一句寫"My name is..."就註定整篇要改了
作者: lolitass (嘿)   2019-07-08 11:28:00
典型把中文自傳翻成英文 給我第一份寫得很像 英文的邏輯跟中文不同 先找的範例看看
作者: kryolanfans (理查)   2019-07-08 11:33:00
用民國年是怎麼樣的概念...
作者: LuMya   2019-07-08 11:39:00
如果不是面商業英文等級的需求覺得ok能輔助專業能力即可 自傳寫的太好英文口試面一下就知道這文章是不是你寫的 建議誠實
作者: suweiQQ (寶貝)   2019-07-08 11:53:00
using office? 還沒畢業說自己是marketer?
作者: c11121212 (吃吃)   2019-07-08 12:13:00
真心建議先去網路上多找幾篇英文自傳和履歷看一下,不熟悉或第一次寫多參考他人寫法會比較順
作者: snoopy200279 (寶傑,你覺得呢?)   2019-07-08 13:31:00
這是國高中英文程度? 句子太短 I太多
作者: anr2 (???)   2019-07-08 16:33:00
友善一點吧 大家都混口飯吃
作者: tin8420 (恆恆)   2019-07-08 16:38:00
時態要注意 自傳描述過去 80%以上過去式 建議你可以使用grammarly去修正
作者: anper (鏡中人)   2019-07-08 18:04:00
參考別人都怎麼寫的,模仿看看
作者: Saaski (GreedIsGood)   2019-07-08 21:17:00
英文很慘,不過看的出來有用心在寫,加油啦
作者: bravo223999 (ShiJie)   2019-07-08 22:33:00
加油
作者: skyyo (魯蛇收集師)   2019-07-09 08:32:00
I你I I I不完~
作者: showhere (人參阿)   2019-07-09 09:22:00
I好像真的有點多,但有努力寫給推
作者: eachunglin (POLO)   2019-07-11 09:10:00
找範本改寫吧 做事情要找對方法啊~

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