My name is , I am studying in the third year of studies towards National Chia
yi University - Department of Marketing and Tourism Management. I am passion a
te for social media marketing.
I am a coordinator of the treasure love community responsible for the plannin
g and execution of the event. I was responsible for an activity to Welcome New
Students resulting in expanding my team to 10 people from 5 initially.
I have served as a public relations role experience in writing and writing a c
opy. I have an idea on planning a copy.
Despite my hectic schedule at school, I also participate in several non curric
ular activities, including volunteering for my dormitory, working as a teachin
g assistance at an English Institution...etc. I have learned a lot of interper
sonal and time management skills through the experiences.
I often write about urcosme's product experience. I will publish a product in
ig and get 154 people by love.
Foxconn 94 students internship program.
Help promote Asia Pacific Telecom and computers.
Winning experience:
The 2018 national colleges and universities green tourism creative travel plan
ning competition is preferred. The design concept attracts consumers' journeys
.
License Expertise: The score is 725 points. I use tutoring and listening to En
glish broadcasts to increase my English ability.
While I am looking into a full time summer internship, I will also be availabl
e to continue working on a part-time basis when the new semester gets started.
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Thank you very much for your time. I look forward to discussing with you soon.
可以請大家幫我看看，並給予我建議嗎？謝謝

直接找人重新寫一篇 感覺會好點

這篇真的不行，表面上是英文，但實際上都是用中文邏輯寫的，感覺很像把中文自傳丟進google翻譯的結果，建議找人直接重寫一篇+1

建議你英文不好就只寫中文自傳就可以了，或者去網路上找英文自傳的template 改成自己的版本，你這個要整個砍掉重練

我居然看得懂

中文式英文 第二句開頭就不想看了

用西元吧......

英文寫的不太好 看不是很懂

好慘 先去參考別人寫的範本吧

這是中文還英文....gg

小建議，英文不光是單字而已，句型跟文法也都很重要，看得出來你在單字上有用心，但句型不是很順暢，文法上也有明顯錯誤。如果把你這份自傳當成你交給公司的第一份作業處理，你覺得應該再花多少功夫才能達到滿分呢？

My penis long.

英文字傳看到第一句寫"My name is..."就註定整篇要改了

典型把中文自傳翻成英文 給我第一份寫得很像 英文的邏輯跟中文不同 先找的範例看看

用民國年是怎麼樣的概念...

如果不是面商業英文等級的需求覺得ok能輔助專業能力即可 自傳寫的太好英文口試面一下就知道這文章是不是你寫的 建議誠實

using office? 還沒畢業說自己是marketer?

真心建議先去網路上多找幾篇英文自傳和履歷看一下，不熟悉或第一次寫多參考他人寫法會比較順

這是國高中英文程度? 句子太短 I太多

友善一點吧 大家都混口飯吃

時態要注意 自傳描述過去 80%以上過去式 建議你可以使用grammarly去修正

參考別人都怎麼寫的，模仿看看

英文很慘，不過看的出來有用心在寫，加油啦

加油

I你I I I不完~

I好像真的有點多，但有努力寫給推

找範本改寫吧 做事情要找對方法啊～